STORY INFO
Careful—You’ll Slip, Fall, and Die on Those Slippery Slopes
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Author
Liv Chocolate
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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68
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cw: references to sexual assault, kidnapping, and murderThe first time I crossed a street by myself—as in, without one or both of my parents present—I was seventeen. My parents warned me that the outside world was dangerous, and that, if something were to happen to me, I wouldn't know what to do. According to my parents, kidnappers, murderers, and kidnapper-murderers lurked on every corner of our small, suburban town where, statistically, my chances of becoming the victim of a violent crim...
Outstanding reviews
Wow, so sad. It took courage to write this. I commend you.
Thank you, Roger! I feel writing about things like this can be therapeutic but yes difficult
Very entertaining it had my attention the whole time.It reminded me of my childhood great story!
Hi Bliss! I always get excited when I meet someone who had a similar experience. Thank you for reading and good to "meet" you!
Hi Bliss! I always get excited when I meet someone who had a similar experience. Thank you for reading and good to "meet" you!
Hi Bliss! I always get excited when I meet someone who had a similar experience. Thank you for reading and good to "meet" you!
Hi Bliss! I always get excited when I meet someone who had a similar experience. Thank you for reading and good to "meet" you!
Hi Bliss! I always get excited when I meet someone who had a similar experience. Thank you for reading and good to "meet" you!
Hi Bliss! I always get excited when I meet someone who had a similar experience. Thank you for reading and good to "meet" you!
You're too talented to create a mess. You could have five minutes and whip out something that'll leave us all shook. Seriously! Took me years to get a phone too. I asked my friend w a phone for a name of a random phone model, and then I just told everyone I had that type so they wouldn't make fun of me. Had this nonexistent Motorolla Pebl for years. can't wait to stalk your profile later!
Lol Zack, why is this fool copy and pasting your comments? Look up Teknovate Crm on Reedsy and go to his comments - wouldn't click on his weird ass link tho lol
Im taking you to the desert to frolic in the ecstasy of this well deserved win. No rules, just sand and stars. 🐍 ✨
I can't way, bday boy. I'll try to stop talking your ear off about the same writing topic 24/7. I have an obsessive personality type. (But I'm also obsessed w you). <3
As a teacher, I have encountered a few students who were handicapped by being too sheltered just like this. Thanks for sharing this piece; it's always good to be cautious, but another thing entirely to be neurotically paranoid.
Thanks for your comment, David - you are absolutely right. It renders the kids pretty much completely dependent. Random good memory of a first grade teacher though. I told her I didn't know how to walk to the playground and needed help and she just said "You don't need help. You know how to get there," and I did. That moment really stuck w me bc it was the first time in my life an adult told me I didn't need help. It gave me a boost of confidence when I walked to the playground on my own.
I grew up on a farm and, literally, was playing in the woods at the age of four years old within sight of our house. I was thankful for my independence. Hopefully, this story will open some eyes.
frrr tho
I enjoyed this story a lot! I really liked that I was on the edge of my seat waiting for a scary event, and then realized at the end that the real scariness comes from too much protection. An interesting, amusing story with a message.
Thank you, Kathryn! Definitely a self-fulfilling prophecy and a good way to make kids "street dumb" which defeats the purpose of the protection
Thank you, Kathryn! Definitely a self-fulfilling prophecy and a good way to make kids "street dumb" which defeats the purpose of the protection
I'm super curious about the nearby correctional facility you mention. Sounds like you have some gold material for a story if you're open to sharing. Thank you so much for reading Your point that overprotective parents get to enjoy all their own freedoms is completely true and something I regret not mentioning in this story. The overprotection is really less of an act of selfless protection and more of a selfish act to ease their own anxieties. You have my follow!
I'm super curious about the nearby correctional facility you mention. Sounds like you have some gold material for a story if you're open to sharing. Thank you so much for reading Your point that overprotective parents get to enjoy all their own freedoms is completely true and something I regret not mentioning in this story. The overprotection is really less of an act of selfless protection and more of a selfish act to ease their own anxieties. You have my follow!
I'm super curious about the nearby correctional facility you mention. Sounds like you have some gold material for a story if you're open to sharing. Thank you so much for reading Your point that overprotective parents get to enjoy all their own freedoms is completely true and something I regret not mentioning in this story. The overprotection is really less of an act of selfless protection and more of a selfish act to ease their own anxieties. You have my follow!
honestly wow- this is how i want to write in the future
That is such a high compliment. Thank you, Divine!
That is such a high compliment. Thank you, Divine!
That is such a high compliment. Thank you, Divine!
Funny/unsettling definitely achieved! Congrats on the win :D
Hi, Miss Chocolate, I'm a student in Highschool and we're currently assigned an essay to your story. I and the class of 2025 are so impressed and inspired by your narrative and were wondering if you could reach out to my English teacher to set up some kind of meeting because my peers and I would meet you. Her email is [email protected]
Hi Lily, that's so awesome! Thanks for reaching out. I'll send her an email this Monday
This somehow breaks my heart and infuriates me at the same time. One one hand, I knew the parents weren't wrong, they were just unnecessarily paranoid but on the other end my fingers were tingling from wanting to shove them hard. It was deeply engrossing, and the language went straight to my heart (I loved the line--I had packed my suitcase a week in advance) as that is something I always do. It also beautifully shows the dangers of paranoia. Congrats on the well-deserved win!!
Shaili, thank you for your thoughtful comment! I'm glad you felt involved in the story <3 always encouraging to hear when I've made a reader feel what the characters were feeling
So sad but amazing! Good job.
Thank you!
All too familiar😕
sorry to hear :( thanks for reading!
OMG! Girl, you are so amazing! This has to be one of my favorite stories you have written! Keep writing, you're going to do great things in life, I just know it!
This is such an encouraging comment! Really really means a lot <3 thank you for reading
That is some skill! I commend your effort- I love your style and ability. Especially when you use words like kidnapper-murderers, words that some people use to get points across. I think too often people get caught up in making sure their writing is correct. They forget that sometimes it creates depth to use certain words instead of the word that is grammatically right.
Oh. My. God! You dared to write a story and post it? Do you have any idea how dangerous that is? Glad you did. It is a great bit of writing.I grew up in a completely different age. We would wander in the woods miles from home,not come back until dark, and nobody cared. Hmmm. Maybe they were just hoping I wouldn't come back.
Thanks, Lee! I can tell we're going to be good writing friends based on your sarcasm alone. I grew up in the late 90s and early 2000s, but I would've loved to trade decades w you. Wandering in the woods until dark sounds like something out of a movie to me.
Well written, draws you in and holds you - the ending highlights how parents can actually make you dependent rather than independent I am happy that you fought for your independence
Thank you, Aj! And that's exactly what tends to happen. I played catch up but I think I'm finally there! :D thank you again
An enjoyable read. A very clever piece of writing complete with an embedded object lesson. Well done!RG
Thank you, Richard!
i love this story its sad but happy and weird in its own way but its awesome
Thank you, Ezekiel, I like happy-weird!
This is such a good story. I've read it a few times and it still hits me. The first time, I was waiting for the other shoe to drop, and then when it didn't, I realized waiting for the other shoe to drop is the problem.
Thank you, Lindsey! That's a pretty mind-blowing way to think about it. It almost puts you in the paranoid characters' mindset. I haven't thought of that
Also, every time I've read this, I felt the stab of betrayal from the lie of going to see the movie like it happened to me. What an awful thing to do to someone.
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