STORY INFO
Departed, Return
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Author
Emily Holding
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
63
Content
“And then there was another Mark,” Dad recalls, sending the table into an encore of laughter. “Stop it!” Hannah pleads, tears rolling over sun-reddened cheeks. She perches opposite him, one leg hiked on the serrated bistro chair, a rum and coke bubbling in her left hand, the right clutching her stomach. She is 18, the spit of her mother – so she’s told – and will be off to university in two mont...
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Congrats on the win!! I can’t believe you won with your first entry! That’s amazing! Please, keep this up! I loved your story!
Came here to say this too! Super jealous but also impressed for her.
Neither can I haha! Thank you so much, glad you enjoyed :)
A woman caught between her mother’s death and her daughter’s new beginning accompany the guilt that she could have done more, with the rising and unrising sun a beautiful metaphor. Congratulations on your win, Emily!
Thank you Karen :)
Congratulations on your win! Beautiful story and I resonate so deeply with being stuck in your own head as she is. The wonderful descriptions leave nothing to the imagination. Well done!
Thanks Amy, much appreciated!
Congrats on the win. Been watching and learning for a while, huh? Then, Bam! Win with first entry.🥳🎉
Definitely haha! There's so much great advice from writers out there, and I finally decided to take the leap :) Thank you!
Definitely haha! There's so much great advice from writers out there, and I finally decided to take the leap :) Thank you!
No surprise here. Let me be the first to congratulate you on a remarkable story.
Thank you so much for your kind words and warm welcome Rebecca!! I'll definitely have to check out Swimming Home :)
You'll love Levy; she's the master of the fractured form.
Welcome to Reedsy, and congratulations! Your writing style is superb. Absolutely stunning. I've learned so much from you with just this story. What a unique and creative approach to the sun setting and rising again.
Oh my gosh, thank you so much!
I thought this prompt would be so hard to accomplish with a limited amount of words, but you captured it all beautifully. Great job.
Thank you :)
First entry, yet you wrote it with such inspirational confidence, as if this particular prompt truly spoke to you, or you are a diamond in the rough. Well, miss Holding, you've been spotted now. Congratulations, I'm still in the confidence gathering stage myself, but seeing an author such as yourself, as I said before, it's inspirational. Thank you.
The prompt definitely struck something for me, I'd been in the confidence-gathering stage for a while! I hope you'll take that next step as soon as you feel even a little ready - would love to see your work here :)
I love the descriptions you have in here. Well done!
Thank you!
Very nice, although I'm not sure if I understood it all.
Thank you for reading regardless
Emily, this was wonderfully done. The sun reversing, scrubbing, jumping forward, then back, setting, rising, setting, unsetting, becomes a tangible way of showing how memories are replayed, relived, then relived again, out of order, with the meaning coming from the kaleidoscope of images all connected to loss and regret (but with love and beauty too).Very well done, and a deserved win (on your first try). Now you need to write more!
Hi Emily!Welcome, welcome! And, of course, congratulations! This piece was an absolutely wonderful explanation of the complicated nature of being a woman. I appreciated the way that you juxtaposed the two different lives, one beginning, and one truly ending between the mother and the daughter, as well as the mother in the middle. As a romantic at heart, I sincerely hope that she finds the peace that she wants to, and that her marriage manages to flow back together again. Nice work!!
So so beautiful.
I'm speechless right now . This is amazing!!
I'd like to know what happens next
Truly exceptional imagery. I was especially drawn to your descriptions of the sky and details from past memories . I did have some trouble following who was speaking but, maybe that was a part of the aesthetic or potentially I missed some smaller details somewhere. Anyways, it was really inspiring to read your writing, you are very talented.
Truly exceptional imagery. I was especially drawn to your descriptions of the sky and details from past memories . I did have some trouble following who was speaking but, maybe that was a part of the aesthetic or potentially I missed some smaller details somewhere. Anyways, it was really inspiring to read your writing, you are very talented.
Thanks for the feedback, Ken! Everyone has their preferences - I do tend to lean towards stylistic choices more, especially in this piece. Appreciate you reading!
Thanks for the feedback, Ken! Everyone has their preferences - I do tend to lean towards stylistic choices more, especially in this piece. Appreciate you reading!
Congrats. I can see you for business. Welcome.
Thank you :)
Congratulations on the win! Amazing that you won with your first entry! Beautiful story, a well deserved win.
Thank you very much :)