STORY INFO
Emma
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Author
Victoria Macleod
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
77
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I did it because I liked the way it made me feel. The transaction pleased me even before the idea became a reality. The see-saw of our friendship now tipped in my favour- I the one swinging her legs loftily, gripping the handles with sweaty palms. Looking down on her smiling face as she crouched uncomfortably, waiting for her turn to rise. I did it because 23 years of knowing and loving Emma had ...
Outstanding reviews
Congratulations on your win Victoria, and welcome to Reedsy. Quite an impressive way to start. Look forward to seeing more of your work.
Hi Kevin, thank you so much! I’ve been overwhelmed by all the encouragement and helpful feedback- it’s been such a great surprise and I’m just looking forward to learning more from you all! Thanks again
Very well written, I found myself morbidly curious on the outcome! So great use of conflict. I thought your prose was also nice and flowed well. The uneasy tone was there from the start, almost like in "A Separate Peace". Well Done!
"uneasy tone" yes yes !!
Hi Therese, thank you! I’m so glad you felt the unease- I felt it myself. Can I ask is “ A separate Peace” a story on here? Will have to check it out!
Yes definitely shares a similar vibe and tension! "A Separate Peace" is a famous book written by John Knowles, about a friendship between two boys and how hidden jealousy caused the unimaginable to happen outcome to happen as a result. Highly recommend "A Sep Peace"
No good deed goes unpunished, and in this case the punishment is being delivered through an internal conflict. I could actually see this happening. Raw emotion. I love how you used social media as a device, it felt quite real. Congratulations on the win :)
Thank you Richard! I’m definitely drawn to these types of scenarios and have really enjoyed exploring how it might actually feel to be involved. Thanks again!
This story is a tiny universe of emotions. Well-deserved win
Thank you so much Temitope!
Thank you so much Temitope!
Hi Patricia- thank you! And thanks for the feedback I appreciate it!
I respectfully disagree. Emma is sad, and worried, and aware that her life is slipping by and she won't get it back. I don't see emotional bankruptcy here, but simply normal and understandable emotion.
Congratualtions on your win Victoria. Trult deserved. Great emotional story!
Thank you KG!
Wonderfully written, Victoria! I was totally hooked the whole time, and your response to the prompt was very creative. I am always in awe of first-try winners, congratulations and welcome to Reedsy!
Hi Anders! I’m so chuffed honestly, thank you for your enthusiasm!
This was so well written. Congrats on the win - well deserved. I couldn't read it fast enough. I think there is so much potential for a full on book about the friendship and everything that transpires after the baby arrives!
Hi Andrea, thank you so much! I really appreciate that, I actually hadn’t considered breaking it open more for a book but reading your comment has made me consider it ( I’m curious myself to see where it could go) So thank you!
This was absolutely mesmerizing - I was captivated the entire time. The world you built drew me in and now that it’s over I wish I could read it again for the first time.
Hi Amanda! Thank you for such a generous comment- I’m so glad you felt that!
Congrats on the win, Victoria. I can't say this isn't the best story in the contest since I haven't read any of the other stories yet. But for the record, I never really knew what was happening for most of this story.
Hi Ken! Thank you!
Great story
Thank you Gerald!
Thank you Gerald!
Hi Karen! Thank you so much! I also came here to learn and am already gaining so much from the community here- I’m really thankful for it. Thanks for taking the time for the particular encouragement
Great story :D
Thanks Sidney!
Fine work. I worked on the same prompt and I just noticed that what I considered difficult can be made easy and entertaining. Fine work here. Welcome.
Hi Philip, thank you for the welcome and the encouragement!
Pleasure.
Great take on the prompt. I can't help but believe you wrote this from personal experience. If so, it's a beautiful story, if not, it's even more so. The descriptions of mundane, every-day tasks are exceptional, you find new ways to paint images that everyone has seen prolifically throughout their modern lives.Victory well-deserved
Thank you! I’m really glad that you felt it could have been real ( it’s not my story but was inspired by a magazine article I read!) Thank you again!
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What a beautiful story! Your character's emotions are so real!
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