STORY INFO
Foretold in Smoke
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Author
Aeris Walker
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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35
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Content Warning: Mild foul languageMarie S. 5/5 Stars Vivienne is incredible! My life has completely changed since my visit. It’s like a light came on and she’s somehow unlocked all this hidden potential. She’s the best, seriously just go. Call today!Bradley J. 5/5Worth every penny. Highly recommend.Kevin R. 5/5 StarsI never thought I’d come to a place like this, but when I was at an all-...
Outstanding reviews
Thanks Michal!I think I speak for everyone here when I say how much it means that you read our stories so intentionally, with such great attention to detail and meaning. You summed up the two types of people perfectly, so I’m pleased you received the story the way I intended.
Congratulations on the win, Aeris :D
Thank you, Michal! 😊😊
Thank you, Michal! 😊😊
Thank you, Rebecca!! I so appreciate you reading my work and being a part of my writing journey—I think encouragement is one of the best things writers can give each other and you offer it so graciously. I remember reading Heart of Darkness in an early English class, but it’s been a looonngg time. But you picked up exactly what I was going for—a nuanced allusion to what this woman’s power may or may not be over these people. Thank you, again.
Thank you, Rebecca!! I so appreciate you reading my work and being a part of my writing journey—I think encouragement is one of the best things writers can give each other and you offer it so graciously. I remember reading Heart of Darkness in an early English class, but it’s been a looonngg time. But you picked up exactly what I was going for—a nuanced allusion to what this woman’s power may or may not be over these people. Thank you, again.
Hi Nandini! Thank you so much for reading and leaving your kind thoughts. I’m glad you enjoyed the story 😊
This was a very original and deeply perceptive story. You demonstrate a stunning knowledge of human nature. In the end, our lives are what we invest in them. Those who are merely timid or struggling or anxious but open often need just a little push to fly, while those who are narrow, selfish, demanding, and emotionally barren are the architects of their own unhappiness and frustration. Loved this.
Hi Carla! Thank you so much reading. I love how you described that, “architects of their own unhappiness.” That’s exactly what I was trying to portray. So glad you enjoyed the story!
Hi Carla! Thank you so much reading. I love how you described that, “architects of their own unhappiness.” That’s exactly what I was trying to portray. So glad you enjoyed the story!
I so appreciate you reading and commenting, Zack, you a truly such a wonderful part of this community! And I think part of what makes you such a great writer as well is that you read so intentionally and pay close attention to what works or doesn’t work for you in all of these stories, then implement that in your own writing. Beyond any competition, encouragement like this is such a reward, so thank you.
I so appreciate you reading and commenting, Zack, you a truly such a wonderful part of this community! And I think part of what makes you such a great writer as well is that you read so intentionally and pay close attention to what works or doesn’t work for you in all of these stories, then implement that in your own writing. Beyond any competition, encouragement like this is such a reward, so thank you.
I agree—it’s amazing to see how everyone approaches the same prompts from a completely different angle. Glad we can all inspire each other :)
Aeris! Congratulations on the win! Well-deserved, and I'm happy to see your name on the front page!
Thank you so much Zack!! It’s such a surreal feeling 😬
I agree—it’s amazing to see how everyone approaches the same prompts from a completely different angle. Glad we can all inspire each other :)
I agree—it’s amazing to see how everyone approaches the same prompts from a completely different angle. Glad we can all inspire each other :)
Thank you, Jim! I so appreciate your kind feedback. I’m still not quite certain if this technically falls into second POV or not, since it is still coming from a character’s perspective but just as more of an inner monologue with her contrasting types of clients, but I’m glad the POV felt natural! That’s always a risk when trying something unique is that the effect comes across as jarring and disorienting instead.Looking forward to your next story too ;)
Yes, you're right. Whenever I see lots of you's repeated I think 'OoOoOoOoh second person!' But I think it could be in first person? I'm a bear of too little brain to know. Anyhow, it doesn't matter which POV it's in if the end result works, which it does!
Oooh I love this! You picked my number one fave prompt of the week as well :DAdored the parallel between the first and the seconf half and how they mirrored each other. Excellent. And the last sentence... yess. It's my favourite one here. Loved it so much - I enjoyed the first half, it was stunning, but it was when I got to the one star reviews and the line "I know your type." making a comeback was when I thought: genius.
Hey Riel! Thank you, thank you. I loved this prompt too, and was worried it might have already been too saturated with stereotypical fortune teller tales, but I just couldn’t resist. Ugh. That last line went through a lot of changes, so I’m so glad it hit home! Thanks for reading and for leaving your feedback—you’re always such a ray of sunshine ☀️
Aeris! Congrats for the win!! :D
Thank you, Riel!! I really appreciate it 😊
Aeris, this is beautifully written. I love the second person POV and the two sides of the penny. I love the two perspectives and the way you've mirrored the language on each side. Lovely interpretation of the prompt. I just listened to Roxie Goes Rogue on Blue Marble too. Thoroughly enjoyed your reading of it and laughed so hard. I hope you record more stories.
Thank you, Jay! I really appreciate you reading. And listening—that was a new (and slightly nerve wracking) experience for me, but reading stories really seems to bring them to life in a whole new way. So thank you for your encouragement 😊
I was on my daily commute and I was exploring stories based on genre. This time I put "fantasy" and your story was at the top. The title lured me in, the story and aesthetic kept me interested for the whole thing. You must have heard of this a million times, I absolutely loved the comparison/contrast between the two types of "customers" and the POV of the fortune teller and how she interacts with them. I think her sense of "fairness" combined with her uniqueness and authenticity makes her a likeable person. Thank you for this story! :)
Fantastic, Aeris xDI am so amazing for the story. can i know what are you context when you write the story
hi aeris can i have a sypnosis or summary of this story thanks
hi aeris can i have a sypnosis or summary of this story thanks
Hi Sheri! Thanks so much for reading my stories and going all the way to this one. I’m so glad to hear it resonated with you. ☺️
This was super good! I felt like I was really there and could smell the incense. Really great job on using the 5 senses for description.
Thanks Indy! Now if only I had written in a bowl of candy in the entryway, I would have really hit all five senses 😉Thank you for reading, I really appreciate it.
I love this story! I love the descriptive sentences and the two different points of view. Perfect! Congrats on the win :)
What a fantastic story! Great job!
Thank you so much!
Well written.
All of this was incredible. The first half was already beautiful and so intriguing. I truly believed in the character and their perspective. I wanted to know what they thought. The second half made it perfection. Loved it! Thank you.
Hi Becky!! Thanks so much for reading--it means a lot. This was a fun prompt to write for, and I'm so glad to hear you liked the story! :)
Fabulous story, well done. The character just comes to life as you read through the story.Congratulations on your win.
Thank you very much!! :)
I am really late to the party, but holy crap! I don’t have words. A well deserved win! I love how she figures people out, simply by how they walk in and how they react to stuff.“I do not spin the threads of fate, but occasionally, I give the threads a gentle pluck.” - this line!! “But occasionally, I test the threads and hold a flame beneath the strands to watch and see what burns.” - and this line!! WowYou use words really well!
Thank you so much, Bradon! I really appreciate your kind feedback ☺️
I like it
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