STORY INFO
Guava
-
Author
Kaiomi Inniss
-
Categories
-
Danh mục
-
Update
6 months ago
-
Part Chapter
1/??
-
Reads
110
Content
Dear daughter, The day my mother died, I was relieved. I sat in her living room, watching the guavas fall from the tree, rotting in the grass, oozing that sweet juice. Flies swarming over the bruised green fruit, the pungent guava scent wafting through the house. I closed the window.
Outstanding reviews
so beautifully written, profound themes and tender rhetoric make this story perfect. I truly enjoyed reading!
that was wonderful!
I really enjoyed reading that, thank you.
This is a story that you feel in your soul. I have wandered around the world, but I have a place that I return to always that centers me. It is where my ancestors are from and try as I might. I am always drawn back to it. The sense of place that your story evokes is powerful and magical and the intergenerational struggles of mothers and daughters to understand each other always seems to have roots in the garden.
Hello Kaiomi I love your stories. Can I have your email address? I would love to reshare your works.
This was interesting… actually discussed a topic the next day at work because of this. Keep up the good work
This is such a beautiful story! I enjoyed it so much!The letter format was a brilliant choice for this piece, the personality of the story was expressed very well in it.The symbolism of the guava was amazing, I loved it.The complexity of your characters was portrayed beautifully in this piece!Overall, great story!I can’t wait to see more of your work.
This was really good. It’s sad and yet all the talk of fruit trees made me hungry. Your description was excellent.
I thought you did such an amazing job of evoking setting. The shorter run of sentences is a style I really respond to, and I felt truly in this character's perspective throughout the piece. Congratulations.
I thought you did such an amazing job of evoking setting. The shorter run of sentences is a style I really respond to, and I felt truly in this character's perspective throughout the piece. Congratulations.
Hi Kaiomi!Congrats on the shortlisted story! I really like how you formatted this as a letter and brought the cultural references with the different fruits, ending with the guava tree. My mom loved guava so it reminded me of her.Well done! Welcome to the Reedsy community :)
Thank you so much!
One story, one wonder. Why's some people's first story wonder one while some needs to write for months before hitting it. Fine work for sure. Welcome.
Kaiomi: Wonderfully, deftly written story. Loved the repetition of the guava, both real and symbolic. I especially like the phrase :wicked, wicked woman. Mothers and daughters, such complex relationships. You did a wonderful job of portraying these. Thanks for the touching read. Maureen
Thank you Maureen! I appreciate this,
Great story, Kaiomi. Love the letter format you chose for this, love the specificity of the imagery you used throughout (with regards to the trees especially), and I love the relationship and parallels between the mother and the daughter. You used your word count effectively - every sentence was leading to the conclusion, nothing was filler or just for show. Kudos on that. Thanks for sharing and welcome to Reedsy! Looking forward to your next story.P.S. My favorite line was: "Our lineage healed you, my sweet baby."
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed! Thanks for the feedback.
Hi Kaiomi! Welcome to reedsy! This is a beautiful story! Very well written, the imagery was amazing as was the character voice. I loved it! I hope to see more writing or yours on here in the future.
Thank you so much! That means a lot.
TOP Story