STORY INFO
Kiss of the Snake
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Author
Zilla Babbitt
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
94
Content
Yellow DayToday is a yellow day. The sunlight sneaks in through the window, writhing on the floor like a snake. Outside, the leafy pecan tree shakes in the wind.To be honest, I do not write. When I do, it is facts and information. In the city I did not have time for poetry or pretty words. No one wanted pretty words or expected it of me. But now, alone with the cold stone and cold yellow light and snakes made from the sun, I have time.
Outstanding reviews
Me encanta la incorporación de dos idiomas! Gracias por representar la comunidad bilingüe en tu creación. De verdad tu cuento me llevó a otro mundo y hasta sentí el toquecito de Texas con el querido árbol de pecan. Me imagino que te inspira escribir sentada en un escritorio antiguo con su propia historia y voz con la lijera brisa acariciando tus mejillas. Que Dios te siga bendiciendo en cada momento.
Muchas, muchas gracias para su comentario. Me da gusto que te hice recordar a Texas.
I completely agree with Cora! Though, I did have to put both of these comments into Google Translate to figure out what you were saying. ;)
Same. I love reading this story over and over again.
same here, I completely agree with cora and as Ranya said, had to put the comments in google translatewell done Zilla!
I also had to put it in tanslate. oh well!! I completely agree Cora, and Zilla great great story!!
lol same :D
siento que lo resumiste a la perfección, cora- me encanta la cuestión de los múltiples idiomas también. realmente agrega un acento agradable a la historia.
Here's the translate if u need it. Thx!!I love the addition of two languages! Thank you for representing the bilingual community in your creation. Your story really took me to another world and I even felt the touch of Texas with the beloved pecan tree. I imagine it inspires you to write while sitting at an old desk with your own story and voice with the light breeze caressing your cheeks. May God continue to bless you at all times.
Amaing story! I loved how you "named" each day. Do you have any advice for a begining writer?
Thanks so much! I would definitely say read. I know everybody says that, but for real. I read all the time, when I have the time :). Read all kinds of things with different voices, from Tolkien to Valente to Shakespeare to Reedsy winners-- that way you begin to echo the different voices in your own work, and thus find your own unique voice. Another thing is to write, duh. And notice things. Soak up color. I love green, for one, and I have to have a window open when I write.
Thanks for the advice! Personally, I read ALOT, it's kind of an obsession. Interesting advice about the color "absorbtion", I'll try it.
haha begining writer huh Amany?
Wowwww this was AGES ago...I still consider myself as a begining writer though.
If you're a beginner I'm SCARED to see what professional writer Amany will look like.
Haha thanks this made me smile :)
Yw!!! That's what I aim to do!
Exactly my thoughts lol
Exactly my thoughts lol
Exactly my thoughts lol
Happy to provide it! And ooooh, that makes sense! The writing turning into a lifeline. If you do make it into a novel (which I think would be super awesome! At the least, this would lend itself well to a novella in flash), you could play around with his earlier entries being more to the point and with less breadth of vocabulary. An entry on him just going through different words/turns of phrases he's heard throughout his life could be a really cool way to hammer in the shift. Appreciate you how you've manged to provoke so many thoughts!
Thanks so much! I enjoy this kind of literary bantering that turns into seriously helpful critique :).
I second that
Great idea I must say
Zilla, I´m fluent in both languages and I absolutely love the way you combined both languages. Well-deserved win, One of my favorites by far. Job well-done. Nobody knows neither why we laugh nor why we cry....
As I was reading this, I just wondered, "What's her favorite color?" ☺
Haha! I don't actually know. I love green things, but I think white and yellow inspire me when I write. Maybe I can just say black because it's all the colors mashed together.
Yeah, black is a good color, very neutral. Honestly, I prefer aquamarine as a general favourite color, but before that it was definitely black. I really enjoy writing in more natural colors like greens, browns, khakis, stuff like that. I then to write a lot of stories with nature settings. 😀
Hi, Zilla, I loved your story and your style. I know you wrote this several years ago, but I just noticed it. By the way, black is not all colors mashed together; white is. Black actually is the absence of color.
Lol
Very unique. I have never read a story this good. It is different from the other stories I read with this prompt, this story stands out. I can see why you won. Great job!
Wow! That is a very high compliment! Thank you so much.
Your welcome:)
I love the Spanish you put in this story!
Gracias!
Congratulations on winning the contest, Zilla! This story is beautifully written.
Yay!
Wow! How on earth do you come up with such unique and fascinating stories?? Do you have any advice for coming up with unique stories?
Thank you so much! I guess I'd say to read, and read all kinds of things. Notice things around you, make sure you're not overtired all the time. I always have to have a window near me when I write, or flowers or something green. It makes me happy and helps enrichen my work.
That was so good! I can see why it won!
Zilla, you are wondrously prolific, and I know this story is "old" at this point, but I needed to comment on this one first because it just took my breath away. You have such a gift for descriptive imagery, and you know how to craft a sentence with real punch. That last line haunts me.
Thank you so much!
I know a story is brilliant when I think "Damn, why didn't I think of *that*?" As a Venezuelan, I recognized many elements of their prisons (sadly). Great job and congratulatiosn for the win.
I must say, I never before liked a character whose name I didn't even know xDAs others have said, your choice of names for days instead of dates seems like such a small detail, yet it adds so much to the feel of the story.Definitely deserved the win. Great job! :)
Deserved win Zilla!
Brilliant writing, and such a fabulously unique idea of having Colour Days for the entries. I especially loved the snake imagery. Congratulations on a well-deserved win! And keep us posted if you do decide to extend your idea into a novel.... great idea
Great story, congrats on the win!
I really didn't get that But I must say your vocabulary is stupendous.Eres un buen escritor!!!
Congratulations! This was my favorite story of the ones I read this week. :)
As a writer, this was one of the saddest sentences I have ever read in any work:"The foil cannot hold the markings of my pencil".I physically felt a recoil at the end of that sentence. The contrast of how simple the words are yet how powerful the impact of their meaning is masterful. When you wrote that line, did you pause afterwards and really feel the heft of it?
Thank you! Honestly I can't remember. I do remember thinking, I like this, after I wrote "he misses his family." I'm so glad you enjoyed this! I just finished the first draft of a novel continuation of this and will start editing in about a month.
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