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Liability in Lingotto

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When the police forcibly entered 43-year-old Paulina Fiore’s apartment, they found her lifeless body on the floor of the kitchen, covered in mysterious bruises. The lead detective immediately suspected homicide and ordered an autopsy. But after extensive analysis, the coroner concluded the cause of death was vitamin C deficiency.In a video appearing on social media, Stephanie Brolo, who sources confirm is a close friend of Paulina, is seen weeping and uttering, “This is all my fault.”*...

Outstanding reviews

I enjoyed this detective story and I love the narrator’s culpability in the end. Like one of the other commenters, I got a noir vibe too. Like a black and white movie with Humphrey Bogart and cigars. No single raindrop believes it’s responsible for the flood.
Thanks for reading and commenting. "No single raindrop believes it’s responsible for the flood." a great phrase and such an accurate way to describe what I was trying to get at.
Clapping. Nice proverb.
The Italian setting was another character in the story!"Every industry is selling a product, and at its core, the news industry sells fear."You sold a great story! BTW for an Italian, the espresso count was too low ;)
Laughing.
I like your diction and storyline. Very excellent work, Satisfying ending.
- 2 points and - 6 points and - 1 points
Hi Abraham, Is that commentary directed at me, Abraham? The points you have listed there? Just wondering.
Yup it is.
What does it mean?
What does it mean?
Thanks for reading! yes! You really captured the ironies i was pointing at in the story. Esp about how we tend to have high morals until they interfere with our own priorities.
What an amazing story! What a twist! We know that he wasn't responsible for her death, but WOW! You are an amazing writer!
What a good twist! Excellent writing, brilliant story.
You have two out of three spots in this genre. You might want to come back to it more often
Your story ably demonstrated the cynical touch of a button world where fake news is more powerful/ interesting than the genuine. At least, most of the time. In a world where marketing is everything and no one can avoid getting caught up with it if they want to stay on top of the game. A great read Scott
Thanks so much for reading and commenting:)
That is incredible!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! The suspense is unbearable. You are a great writer.
thanks! happy your enjoyed it.
Love it! Thanks. You capture the newsroom culture well. And the interactions between journalists and their "subjects". I was news editor on a daily paper and struggled with the increasing pressure from "marketing and sales" to focus on clickbait stories and skim the surface of stories. Well done.
That's good to hear this is fairly accurate, as I don't work in journalism. I did hear a few of these gripes from journalists I had hung out with in Hong Kong a few years ago. Oh, that's the correct expression "marketing and sales", wish I had used that in the story.
I like the twists and ending of this story. Congratulations on this well-deserved win!!
thanks for reading!
Hi Scott!Congratulations on the win! It was well deserved! I think I loved the fact that this story ends with this feeling of a slap in the face from reality. I also thought that this story evoked heartbreak for so many souls. I picked a favorite line: I cancel dinner with my girlfriend Gabrielle to set up a cozy dinner with a 41-year-old man.Thanks for writing!
Wow, this really held my attention! Well done!
Thank you!
The best story I ever read in my life! This is really entertaining, my friend!
Thank you! One of the best comments ive ever received, what part about it did you like besr?
wow, you really used this prompt well !
*clap clap clap* Great job Scott. Congratulations on the win.
You cant clap through a screen moron.
Whatever. I can slap the screen instead if you want.
great story,... super congratulations. Very good ending, a bit wild in the beginning ... could be tighter. I lost the connection with Biana and Stephanie towards the end. But it was an excellent turn of words. Keep writing.
Happy you enjoyed it and thx for commenting. Agree a few things could have been streamlined and made clearer, one week was a tight time frame for editing a story with this many scenes.
I loved this. Excellent work, Scott. Your ability to paint the scene and further grasp my attention made the story that much more fun to read. I’ll even say it reminds me why I avoid online articles and clickbait like the plague! Congrats on winning <3
Thanks for reading;)
This felt very much like a true journalist grappling with true core problems of the (dying) trade. I really enjoyed the notion of how fake or exaggerated news IS indeed making us all sick in one way or another! It's unscrupulous what they're doing quite intentionally and we need to find ways to protect ourselves. Thank you for another interesting, thought-provoking, intricate story! And congratulations on the win!
Thanks for commenting, I did know a few journalists in the past who mentioned a few of the themes in the story, and the pressure to quickly grind out articles everyday that get clicks .
Good job on your win, Scott! :)
thx!

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