STORY INFO
Never Follow the Lights
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Author
Caroline Tuohy
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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67
Content
Deidre from accounting is going on a year long tour of Europe. The boss made everyone squeeze into the break room to toast pale, flabby Deidre goodbye on her last day. Everyone raised their plastic cup of warm fizzy wine while Deidre clutched a supermarket bouquet of carnations and smiled.Back at your desk you snap your laptop shut, slide it into your satchel and grant yourself an Irish goodbye. You don’t particularly like anyone at this company that you’ve been working at for 8 years now. You walk to the underground sta...
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Hi Caroline!Cool 2nd person POV, present tense; unusual. Good description, especially on the intro describing Deidre from Accounting. Huh another Nullabour Plain reference - Chris just wrote a story about that, how weird."She taps the bar with her beefy hands-" nice imagery.Huh, poetry? Cool! I think that really adds to the idea of being by a fire.I liked the ending - reminds us that there's something holy and magical and dangerous about the night sky. Really cool, good tone, interesting narrator ...R
Hi Caroline!Cool 2nd person POV, present tense; unusual. Good description, especially on the intro describing Deidre from Accounting. Huh another Nullabour Plain reference - Chris just wrote a story about that, how weird."She taps the bar with her beefy hands-" nice imagery.Huh, poetry? Cool! I think that really adds to the idea of being by a fire.I liked the ending - reminds us that there's something holy and magical and dangerous about the night sky. Really cool, good tone, interesting narrator ...R
Hey, your work was great - unusual and distinctive - 2nd person is often considered a risk in writing contests so it's not something you see all the time :)Myself, I think you played it well in this piece. Hope to see more of your stuff around here in the weeks ahead!R
Hey, your work was great - unusual and distinctive - 2nd person is often considered a risk in writing contests so it's not something you see all the time :)Myself, I think you played it well in this piece. Hope to see more of your stuff around here in the weeks ahead!R
Thank you so much for your review. I can definitely see from a reader perspective I may have wasted the pub scene as a narrative tool. You’ve made a really good observation here.Otherwise, I’m really grateful you took the time to let me know what you think of my writing. And I’m really glad you enjoyed it. Thank you.
This story is based around the Min Min lights. Find out more about them here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Min_Min_light
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