STORY INFO
No longer at this address
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Author
Kevin Logue
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
37
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John knew it was illegal, but that didn't hinder the temptation. For weeks it sat there, its unread secrets wanting to escape its crinkled manila prison. No one in the local shop or cafe ever heard of Ellie-Mae MacIntyre, never mind living at this address. That only intensified the handwritten letter's draw. Its cursive script, beautiful, elegantly old school, as if it came from the past. Who even sends letters anymore? So alluring, so tempting, so…He couldn't take it any more, that damned letter lurked on ...
Outstanding reviews
I see this as a horror story, the evil inside him creeping out, into alcohol fueled violence. I liked how he grabbed tools to protect himself, the same ones he used as a serial killer. A great conceit! Of many, I liked this line'With a cracked and dirt clogged thumb nail he sliced the secrets free.'
Thanks for reading and commenting, much appreciated. I questioned adding a horror tag when submitting but opted out in the end. It was actually the grabbing of the tools that flipped this story for me and gave birth to a different idea that became this story... That's issue and benefit of pantsing these ha.
Awesome story! Starts off a casual everyday story about a guy down on his luck who has a mystery drop into his lap, then... grabs you by the throat and doesn't let go!Couple of things. Sleep is spelt sleek.Something seems wrong with this line.?Fist clenched, he threw it open the front door.Creepy and cool!
Cheers Derrick for the pick ups, weirdly I had corrected them on Google docs but tired head I copied in the wrong version here ha. Too much of a rush.Glad you enjoyed it, and happy to hear it grabs the attention. This story changed three times whilst writing it so I worried I was chopping too much to hammer it into shape, so appreciate the feedback.
I like the low of the story and how you capture the attention of us readers, the ending made if us want to read more only to realize it was the climax of the story.so captivating story. I LIKED IT ALOT.
Hi Kevin!Congratulations on this outstanding shortlist! I highly admire the writer if you can craft a beautiful mystery because I myself struggle with that particular genre. I love the way that each paragraph gave us another puzzle piece, and I found myself gobbling up the story as fast as I could. The ending was just as thrilling as the beginning. Nice work!!
Thank you very much for such high praise, you've made my morning 😁 I always considered myself a fantasy writer cause it's the genre I read the most but my more suspenseful/mysterious stories seem to resonate with people so maybe I should dabble more in that genre.Cheers for reading and commenting, much appreciated.
Hey Kevin,Congrats on making the short list. Way to go.
Cheers Ken. Just seen you posted a story for the Devils Deal, had a feeling you'd be posting this week. I'll get a read later tonight, in work at the minute.
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I love that you created a story where there's just as much for the reader to assume as there is on the page. That's such a tough thing to do, and the use of tension is fantastic. Well done.
Thanks very much Kevin, appreciate the feedback. I enjoy being a little vague with my story's, when reading I always those moments where you are like, what's going on? Glad I'm able to recreate that to and degree.Cheers again for taking the time to read and commenting, always a pleasure to hear from other writers.
Congrats. Drilling Tools and Stabbing One is not my favorite movie. Fine one here.
Cheers Philip 👍
Welcome.
It took me a bit to get what was going on... I think the first time he passed out with the door open, I got the idea that it was him. I didn’t pick up on the experiment/procedure until the end though. Well written, well deserved shortlist. Good work l!
Cheers Michael, appreciate the comments.
Wow, this is quite a story 😲 I love how you unravel it all, as John unravels too. And the ending is perfect. Great job!!!
Cheers Nina.
Congrats on shortlist! 🤗Got it read now. What a thriller. Deserved the win!
Thanks very much. Genuinely wasn't expecting it, I read so many great entries this week, but I'm happy to accept it 😁
It sounds like this guy cannot see the truth. His personality is split down the middle. He can’t believe he did what he did. Believes it was someone else on one level, but knows it was himself too is how I read it. Compelling story.
Thanks very much Helen. John can't see the truth for sure, whether guilt or his broken mental state I'm not even sure myself. Always great to hear others interpretations. Cheers for reading and commenting,much appreciated.
This is very gripping writing. I had to read it twice to understand, and still not sure I have. Who is writing from the prison? Another version of himself? Split personalities are definitely fascinating material. Leaves you somewhere between horror and pity.
This is very gripping writing. I had to read it twice to understand, and still not sure I have. Who is writing from the prison? Another version of himself? Split personalities are definitely fascinating material. Leaves you somewhere between horror and pity.
Totally get it now! I was wondering how come they left such a dangerous man free at home 🤣 I did get the purpose of the letter clearly, just couldn’t work out who it was from! Thanks for the extra explanations ☺️
Another good story, Kevin. It doesn't read as if it changed its clothes three time before lunch. What you've done here is tough to do, create horror and suspense without resorting to fantasy. In fact, the neat thing about this story is that you lead us to think it could be many things, It could be supernatural, natural, a mistake, a prank, it turns out to be far more serious. And it heightens the suspense when the mc doesn't know anything either. This is not a fun story, but it's a very satisfying one.
Hey Ken, thanks for the feedback - "This is not a fun story, but it's a very satisfying one." This is brilliant quote, and sums up how is feel about it too.How you keeping, any prompts taking your fancy this week or are you battening down the hatches?
Hey Ken, thanks for the feedback - "This is not a fun story, but it's a very satisfying one." This is brilliant quote, and sums up how is feel about it too.How you keeping, any prompts taking your fancy this week or are you battening down the hatches?
Well done, what a thriller! Love the way you’ve kept us guessing until the end, and even then we’re still not sure of the guilty party here. An experiment? A dig into the mind of a Jekyll and hype killer? Great work.
Thanks Michelle, appreciate your feedback. For me it was a Jekyll and Hyde type situation, a split personality, bit like Fight Club meets Shutter Island. I had a section were I went deeper into it all with Dr.Creed but I'll always opt for mystery over resolution 🙂Thanks for reading and commenting.
That's a fun dark mystery! The idea of getting a letter full of crime scene photos, that's a great setup. But it all gets deeper when we realize things don't quite add up, and then we learn the whole thing is a setup, an experiment.First we feel for John, but then suspicion sets in. Ultimately, "Don't you realise your both things at once, the victim and murderer" seems like a good summary.A fun dive into John's guilty mind - thanks for sharing!
That was brilliant!
Thanks very much Ty 😊
That's a pretty cool idea, Kevin. Good story. Thanks for sharing.
Cheers Chris 👍
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Ha, the toolbox shuffle is a most secret and dazzling performance that was once performed for Suleiman the Magnificent and is said to have brought him to tears that flooded thr Ottoman Empire for seven days and nights.Glad you enjoyed the suspense, although I'd be a little worried if he was your role model, ha.I see Behold Poetry has a third outing, looking forward to reading it as soon as I wrap up a story here (Hopefully a second outing for my world of the Nine Mages, if I can hammer it in shape)
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