STORY INFO
Orphan Jack
-
Author
Graham Kinross
-
Categories
-
Danh mục
-
Update
1 year ago
-
Part Chapter
1/??
-
Reads
94
Content
TW: Swearing and mention of death.Jack strolled down the dusty streets of the port towards the space shuttle for his interview. Pale men and women, ignorant after months or years in vacuum, were shifting cargo. The suns of Hellebore cooked the flesh of offworlders to a glowing boiled lobster tan that was in vogue amongst incomers.Jack pulled down the brim of his cap. He lifted the collar of his boiler suit with one hand to save his neck from the crispy barbeque fate of the crowds. In his other hand he carried his ...
Outstanding reviews
Thank you for the very in depth analysis and picking up so many typos and awkward wordings. I made the changes. I’m hoping to keep this one going hand build it into something bigger. It was fun making Jack the kind of person who gets on a lot of people’s nerves because he’s unfiltered. Thanks for reading this and for sharing it as well.
Thank you for the very in depth analysis and picking up so many typos and awkward wordings. I made the changes. I’m hoping to keep this one going hand build it into something bigger. It was fun making Jack the kind of person who gets on a lot of people’s nerves because he’s unfiltered. Thanks for reading this and for sharing it as well.
Thanks. I’m working on a book at the moment, editing it is one thing that’s kept me away from reedsy but I’m going to try to juggle both because editing is mind numbing anyway. Thanks again for your encouragement.
A brave new world.
Thanks for reading and commenting Mary. Have you read A Brave New World? I found it interesting, big scientific ideas which would be very relevant now mixed with social ideas which feel more and more dated. In contrast with that was the way that the main character seemed less sexist than the rest of the cast.
It has been so long I don't remember much about it.
I read it quite recently.
I seems like the more you write the more messed yo your characters are.
Progress…
is Jack the start of a new story?
Yes. I'm about to upload one.
Sweet. You shouod put up a link.
Forgot. Thanks Cassie.
cool I read it now
You;re welcome.
When I saw 'Jack' in the title of both stories I wondered if they were connected. This is the earlier one. Not as exciting as the one I read first (the latest story) This is great to introduce and establish characters. Experience versus credentials. A common problem foe those who grew up in the decades where experience meant everything. My husband says he has a QBE (Qualified by experience) Jack sounds like him! Love the rugged atmosphere of this introductory story.
I like that QBE thing. I might use that in future Jack stories. I teach English in Japan despite having no qualification for it. My wife did a teaching degree so I get a lot of help from her.
I like that QBE thing. I might use that in future Jack stories. I teach English in Japan despite having no qualification for it. My wife did a teaching degree so I get a lot of help from her.
Thank you for reading and commenting. I would change that first HE into Jack but the submission has been verified so I’m not allowed to edit it now. Shame. Thanks again Shirley.
“Max walked and talked with the haste of a cocaine addict dictating his will during an overdose.” You are back! Great dialogue and characterisation here. Cool writing.Well done.
Thanks Helen. It’s good to be back.
Wild imagination with the jargon. Great stuff.This was super enjoyable. A relatable scenario with a skilled, but unqualified teaching the opposite, but that backdrop gave it a very entertaining twang.Really enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing
You’re welcome Tom. I just uploaded a sequel to it. If that’s too much then that’s ok.https://blog.reedsy.com/short-story/vfsztt/
Cool story dude. Jack sounds like a hard ass. Awesome.
Thanks. He’s a rough guy for sure.
You're welcome.
If you enjoyed Jack’s story then you can read on using the link below.https://blog.reedsy.com/short-story/vfsztt/
TOP Story