STORY INFO
Playing God
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Author
Sam Porter
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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32
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It was approaching 2am when Lexi made the discovery that would fracture the world. She skulled the rest of her black coffee and sat the paper cup down on the smooth, white table. She was at the university working on her PhD thesis. The research involved creating controlled, miniature black holes in a Vacuity Machine and then testing its potential for hyper-space travel. It was mostly hypothetical research.Lexi ran the formulas through the Vacuity Machine over and over again. She was analysing the resul...
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The ending is sort of how I feel when anyone tells me writing short story fiction might be a waste of time. But then I think, I just want to believe it will lead somewhere someday, and start typing like wild again.Great writing and good pacing. Look forward to see what you come up with next.
Sam, you are a good storyteller. Congrats and welcome to the show. Unfortunately, I don't think that is how Pope would handle it. It would be handled as this new human nature was handled ten years eleven years ago. Each person would suddenly start finding holes everywhere in it. And the discovery would bow to a superior force after attempting to cow, intimidate and manipulate.
Sam, you are a good storyteller. Congrats and welcome to the show. Unfortunately, I don't think that is how Pope would handle it. It would be handled as this new human nature was handled ten years eleven years ago. Each person would suddenly start finding holes everywhere in it. And the discovery would bow to a superior force after attempting to cow, intimidate and manipulate.
Sam, you are a good storyteller. Congrats and welcome to the show. Unfortunately, I don't think that is how Pope would handle it. It would be handled as this new human nature was handled ten years eleven years ago. Each person would suddenly start finding holes everywhere in it. And the discovery would bow to a superior force after attempting to cow, intimidate and manipulate.
I agree - the skipping of any explanation as to what the "proof" may be is a serious flaw.
I think it adds to the story to keep the details mysterious. Modern story telling can tend to over inform the reader. Less was more here, especially in a short story format.
I have to disagree, because like you said yourself, evidence so conclusive regarding God not existing is hard to imagine and has never been done before. The story is fiction, so how would there be any explanation of the evidence that God doesn't exist without it being nitpicked for being incorrect?
I agree with Abdullah that the lack of details regarding the proof improves the story; and it avoids the old axiom that one cannot disprove a negative.
A truly creative idea and well-written story, congratulations on your win, you deserve it. I have to admit though that I was hoping for some unique and unexpected proof that the Pope would come up with to counteract the discovery. But your ending was very creative and unique, nonetheless, and your entire story was really interesting.
Brilliant!
Brilliant!
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You are right on point in the ending. That was one terrible ending from the perspective of the story.
Loved this story, such a great read, congrats on the win :)
A great conceit for a story-Congrats on the win!
Congratulations! Continued success!
Congrats on the win. Also props for getting a win on your first submission. Definitely an interesting read.
This was a very interesting concept! The win was well deserved.
Loved this one! I was nervous when starting because I thought that this might be a science lesson that I wouldn't understand, but instead was a thoughtful exploration of life's biggest question. Congrats on the win!
Congratulations Sam. I really enjoyed how you paced the story. The structure kept me guessing and I think you blurred the lines of believable and unbelievable very well.
Science fiction isn't usually my jam, but I had to read the winner :) Kudos to a unique concept, an (unfortunately) all too real reaction from the world at such news, the multiple points of view btw Lexi and the Pope, and the unexpectedness of both the Pope's attempt a suicide and the nun jumping to save him, leading to a kiss. That was a great ending. Of course I have so many questions...what was the discovery, namely? But I think part of the craft of short fiction is that you can only allude to some things. Congrats on the win!
nice work anyway, INTRODUCTION OF MYSELF to the reedsy community: hello everyone my name is tom and im new to the reedsy community id appreciate a like on my story if you think it is fantastic. I am a brand new writer and very concerned people may not be liking my story because they think my work is plagarized since I am a first time writer but write like a professional. I swear hand to bible that this is my real work. thank you. happy writing and cheers from the northeast
nice work anyway, INTRODUCTION OF MYSELF to the reedsy community: hello everyone my name is tom and im new to the reedsy community id appreciate a like on my story if you think it is fantastic. I am a brand new writer and very concerned people may not be liking my story because they think my work is plagarized since I am a first time writer but write like a professional. I swear hand to bible that this is my real work. thank you. happy writing and cheers from the northeast
Hello I read this story and it's amazing 😍
Hi Sam, this is a superb piece of writing. The Pope going against everything he stood for his whole life on the world news is very apropos for the story. This story had great flow and good pacing. Well done Sam! Congratulations on the win.LF6
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