STORY INFO
Queen Cymbeline
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Author
Zilla Babbitt
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
92
Content
The island reeked of fish; scattered guts and oozing blank eyes littered the black beaches, and the mountains smelled of bubbling, potting fish intestines. The sky was continually dark with the smoke from the fires beneath the cauldrons, and the water had a thin film of scales and oil, all in the bays and quaysides round the island. In the deepsea around the island, the fish that were still alive avoided the inlets and told tales among their young that a bloodthirsty monster lived on the isle, with a mouthful of s...
Outstanding reviews
Thank you everyone!
In the first paragraph it says the fish avoided the inlets. The live ones, anyway. She either has a hell of a throw with the net or she's catching dead fish.
Haha! Oops, I meant to say that the tide drew the fish into the inlet and trapped them there. Emphasizing that would make more sense. Thank you for your comment.
Congratulations Zilla!! And, I have a feeling Queen Cymbeline knew you had written a winning story. I was impressed with the way you ensured 10 black cats would cross Ione’s path over the course of a day. Sue
I loved the description, you have a way with words, but I found the plot slightly lacking. I got slightly lost after the first paragraph....I know that the prompt said cats but I would have preferred it if the story had focused on the lives of people as they relate to fishing, maybe even the lives of the fish themselves? That said, you painted wonderful imagery and ensared all my sences, in that first paragraph particularly.
Very good story, especially the way you create setting. The immersion into Ione's world is second to none. And then keeps getting better with the interaction between Ione, Queen and the sea.
Very good story, especially the way you create setting. The immersion into Ione's world is second to none. And then keeps getting better with the interaction between Ione, Queen and the sea.
Deserved win!!
Fascinating. The world Ione seems to live in is strange in the most charming way. Particularly liked the expression "checkerboard verdant mountains". It paints a nice image for me.
Great story. You have amazing creative potential. Well done
Nice work. :) I thought I'd give this a read for the heck of it.Everything I could say concerning either critique, or highlights have already been said, so I'll leave it at one word; beautiful.Keep on writing!
As somewhone who lives with 7 cats, this story speaks to me on a spiritual level. I imagine this place would be hell for some but heaven for others. Here's an extrememly belated congrats xD
Queen Cymbeline would be proud!
Wow! This is such a pretty story! I love how you paint her as a witch-like person in the beginning but flip her to a nice girl who lives by the sea and has a lot of cats in the end. It takes talent to do that!
What a lovely descriptive piece. Loved it.
Oh, hi! This is a wonderful story. I think I'd pay you in bubbles and cow jars to write a whole book of this, Zilla. Of course, you should have won this contest because because because and we know you will go very far. You have made us very proud as writers.
Queen Cymbeline lives a good life. Doesn't have to do a thing but sit back and eat.
LOLL (laugh with tears)
Great job Zilla!
congrats Zilla the story is amazing and has a lot of good words.
i find myself wanting to know more about Ione . Very nice descriptions, I was able to picture fish and mountains.
i find myself wanting to know more about Ione . Very nice descriptions, I was able to picture fish and mountains.
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