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Author
AnneMarie Miles
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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1/??
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160
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I was never a morning person. I’d cling to my fur blankets and Egyptian cotton, pulling them up over my head at the first hint of daylight. I’d inhale the newfound darkness of my fuzzy veil and the plush promise of more precious slumber and moan myself back to sleep. If I’d had it my way, I’d wrap my consciousness up like a present and gift myself to the moon to be unwrapped every evening under its worthy gleam.I sigh at the luxurious memory. It is an ache in my body like a phantom limb, though its weight holds nothing a...
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Thanks Danie! I definitely had hand maids tale in mind as well as the holocaust. I do not do my research so I wasn't sure if it stood up to historical fiction, but it was on my mind. So, definitely some dark influences here! I'm glad it came out ok. I whipped this together in pieces and really quickly. Good to know it worked out! Thanks!! I appreciate you!
Thanks Danie! I definitely had hand maids tale in mind as well as the holocaust. I do not do my research so I wasn't sure if it stood up to historical fiction, but it was on my mind. So, definitely some dark influences here! I'm glad it came out ok. I whipped this together in pieces and really quickly. Good to know it worked out! Thanks!! I appreciate you!
The violence of state sanctioned prisons, and horror of loss are given graphic vivid descriptions in this story. The reader doesn't know what happened, but it doesn't matter, the impact on the MC is all too clear. I thought the ending was great. Thanks!
Thank you, Marty! I'm glad the ambiguity still held some meaning. Glad you liked the ending. It surprised me but I'm happy with it.
The ones who could help us wouldn’t help people like us.The great sentence, even this single sentence is enough to explain the whole story.
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Oh my goodness, this is fire. I love your story. It got me in my feels, keep it up. I really do hope that in your mind you gave her a happy ending, I mean come on it was tough to read. I don't mean to be rash, but I think you won the contest.❤️
Thanks for your kind words! I think the MC got her version of a happy ending. That is very sweet of you to say. The judge did not put this one up but I would have been shocked if they had. This isn't my best but it was fun to write. :)
Awesome my bad I'm still new to the website. What do you mean by the judges didn't put your story up? If this wasn't your best then I should read more of your stories cause I thought it was excellent.
You're too kind. I'm not a judge so I don't know all of the details. But if you look at featured stories by genre, there's a section called Recommended Stories ⭐ beneath the former winners. Those are the stories that have been put up by judges, which means they have a chance of winning or being shortlisted. If there's already a "shortlist" tag on it, then that was from a previous contest.
Welcome to Reedsy, by the way!
Welcome to Reedsy, by the way!
Welcome to Reedsy, by the way!
Beautiful writing AnneMarie. The MC's desperation to the point of delirium at the end is heartbreaking.Some really cool expressions in here. 'only cloud was the one bellowing from my mouth' was a badass line.'Took my will to live and threw a lifeless heartbeat in the van' also great. Enjoyed this very much.
Hey Tom! Thanks so much for reading! I spent one morning drinking coffee under a morning moon and just tried to capture little descriptive lines as they came, and I developed the story from there. It was a fun writing process and a different character for me to explore. Thanks for your kind words, glad you enjoyed.
What a beautiful, though heart-breaking story! Really loved all your beautiful descriptions, this one in particular: "If I’d had it my way, I’d wrap my consciousness up like a present and gift myself to the moon to be unwrapped every evening under its worthy gleam."
Thank you Melissa! The inspiration for this one came while writing little descriptive lines while drinking coffee under the moon. The poet in me was pleased to work it into a full on story. Thanks for reading!
Great piece AnneMarie! Cruel how they took your protagonist away from Tildy. Great ending. A supernatural reunion of sorts.
Thank you, Jonathan! I was going for a little delusional ending leading up to her death. The ending kind of just wrote itself but I'm happy with it! Glad you liked it.
Thank you, Jonathan! I was going for a little delusional ending leading up to her death. The ending kind of just wrote itself but I'm happy with it! Glad you liked it.
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