STORY INFO
The Devil is in the Details
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Author
Victoria Shellady
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
30
Content
I was sixteen years old when they found the six bodies underneath our living room floor. I’m not one to share personal details – mostly because I have a tendency to run my mouth and say too much – but I think about that night often. Usually as I’m just crawling into bed, in that time between hazy wakefulness and deep rest. Which, if I’m being honest, I’ve never been the greatest sleeper anyway. I’m at my most productive...
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Hah, very clever. No wonder he was surprised when they found six bodies, he knew there was a seventh. Great story, great writing, great ending.
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This is AMAZING!!! I'm only 12, but I want to write stories JUST LIKE THIS. I love how the main character knew everything that happened, but had seemed completely innocent. The last line of this story is INCREDIBLE. Blew my mind.
This was so good! I need a part two. I wonder where the seventh body is. Great writing and a great story.
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OMG THIS NEEDS TO BE A BOOK! The twists! You're an amazing writer and one day I hope to see your name on the cover of a best-selling novel!!
I need a part two!! Or at least I need to know where the seventh body is! This was such a great story. That last line completely blew me away, I was not expecting it! Well done!
This was bone-chilling and amazing! Perfect for the theme! Miraculous work!
Hi Victoria!What a stunning shortlist! Congratulations! It was written beautifully and you scattered just enough bread crumbs for the mind to begin to wonder about these mysteries. I loved the way you built up the justification in these characters’ minds and interesting to see the way there’s a shift into excusable disdain for the world. I think I knew when you wrote that line about being the father’s kid. Nice work!!
Hi Victoria!What a stunning shortlist! Congratulations! It was written beautifully and you scattered just enough bread crumbs for the mind to begin to wonder about these mysteries. I loved the way you built up the justification in these characters’ minds and interesting to see the way there’s a shift into excusable disdain for the world. I think I knew when you wrote that line about being the father’s kid. Nice work!!
Hi Victoria!What a stunning shortlist! Congratulations! It was written beautifully and you scattered just enough bread crumbs for the mind to begin to wonder about these mysteries. I loved the way you built up the justification in these characters’ minds and interesting to see the way there’s a shift into excusable disdain for the world. I think I knew when you wrote that line about being the father’s kid. Nice work!!
I loved this, you are very talented. Would u consider writing part 2?
Really well done Victoria. I have to ask: was the daughter the killer? Seems like you left some clues along the way that point to that - e.g., "The only thing he was guilty of was spending an increasing amount of time with his students" (sounds like motive BTW). Also reconciles how a criminal forensics professor leaves so much evidence against himself ... he was trying to cover for his daughter.As I typed this out I think I've convinced myself. I love the subtlety - excellent execution.
The daughter is the killer, you're spot on. I played with the idea of both of them being in on it, but I found it more fun to write in that the daughter was the one actually committing crimes and he was covering as best he could for her in a way by not saying anything.
This had a great hook that really delivered on its first line. Good job.
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Love Love Love this piece. You had me from the first sentence, I Must say, I knew the ending was coming, but you delivered with one hell of a punch! Congrats on the shortlist and thanks for sharing
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Frightening. I have to recheck your name. Then, I recalled where I am from. Congrats.
So they were in on it together? That’s how he knew the bodies were in the floor when the police asked?
She was committing the crime. In a way, he was in on it because he didn't out his own daughter right away. He buried the bodies under the floor.
Your first sentence hooked me!
Happy to hear that!
Really good crime thriller filled with suspense, I really liked that ending line and the writing style.
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I guessed she had a hand in there somewhere. Nice reveal. Good suspense.Congrats on the shortlist. This was a thriller.
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Well done. This is a compelling story with a nice twist. I especially like the unique voice of the narrator.
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