STORY INFO
The Escapist
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Author
Dorian Edgerly
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
79
Content
The sun was going down on the last official night of summer, and if I could have, I would have frozen that moment in time forever. I would have let the sun hang eternally over the horizon, painting the ocean and the earth in stunning gold and orange, warming my face and hers despite the breeze that said fall was coming. I would have let it sit there in that spot, unmoving, never giving way to night or coming back again t...
Outstanding reviews
Hi Dorian!Welcome welcome and congratulations on the short list! I absolutely adored how terrifying this piece was in the very beginning because I think that I did an amazing job of truly captivating your sci-fi aspect of the piece. The explanation and desperate nature of humanity was beautifully well described, and I adored the way that you decided to end the peace sometimes the best stories do not get to enjoy a happy ending. Nice work!!
I looked at this prompt and thought, No way can anyone come up with something for that, but you did an amazing job. I loved the overtones of different genres. It all mixed together so well.
Thank you! I liked how specific and odd it was. Didn't allow for much overthinking.
Excellent. Very creative. Very convincing. I was sure Lina was real. I thought this was a pretty tough and bizarre prompt, but you pulled it off beautifully.
Thanks a lot! I feel like the bizarreness kept me from going off-track in the early going.
Congrats and welcome.
Thank you! Happy to be here.
Highly welcomed.
Congrats on the shortlist! What an incredible story! Got some Vanilla Sky vibes - "tech support"- mixed in with some Total Recall. But love how you have this protagonist seeking to escape and all-in on getting out of reality! Great stuff.
Thanks for the feedback! And you nailed it man! Those were the exact vibes I got while writing it!
Congrats on shortlist. Can see why. Great explanation and execution.🥳🎉Welcome aboard.
Thanks! Happy to be here. This seems like a great community! I'm sure I'll post again when I need something to kickstart my writing habit.
Hi Dorian. I enjoyed it and liked the first turn when Lina was different; the subsequent scenarios were also interesting but felt disappointed that it turned out to be Sim. Well written. If you'd like to give my submission a read, I would appreciate it. Thanks!
Hi Arpad, and thanks for the feedback! The story was less about Lina and the protagonist and more about the dangers of losing oneself completely to escapist habits and activities. I'm sure your disappointment was shared by the protagonist! And I have a little time off coming up this week so I'll definitely give yours a read then! Take care!
Scary sci-fi. Hopefully, not a future world problem. Enjoyed reading.
Thank you Karen! I hope the same!
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