STORY INFO
The First Idol
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Author
Tom Bombadil
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
36
Content
“Stop daydreaming Mr. Delano.” In a moment, Mrs. Frampton, subjecting the tender wallflower of my affection to the grotesque spotlight of her own indifference, made cease the contemplation of my life’s own end, the one theme of my existence: Andrea Taylor. It’s the Spring of 2005; I am a 7th grader at Fort Sumter Middle School, home of the Trojans. Andrea sits enthroned one row ahead, thre...
Outstanding reviews
Thank you so much! This meant the world! Jury is out on their love story : )
Excellent, Tom! I love your protags flowery vocabulary. So funny coming from an eleven-year-old! Especially funny that you leaped over the climax of the story, leaving us to wonder exactly what the speech was like. It's much better left to our imaginations.A well-deserved win! Congratulations!
Thank you so much for the kind words KD! You mean you didn't speak like that as an eleven-year-old? : )
"Kyle Schwimmer teased me ferociously until the end of the year. But then, Kyle Schwimmer was never, if only for a brief moment, loved by Andrea Taylor."I loved this line, it's my favourite. Keep up the good work!
Thank you so much Elisa! So appreciate you taking the time to read!
Brilliant comedy, so many funny lines of taking 11 year old student life seriously, in "solemn solidarity" wearing braces,etc.. Sort of a Confederacy of Dunces unselfaware narrator. I almost wish the tone of slapstick comedy carried through to the ending, as I didn't understand the, I love you (they didn't seem to have any interaction before this) and then she leaves. Maybe this is based on a past experience? But huge congrats on the win, I did get a big laugh out of so many parts of this.
Thank you so much Scott! Appreciate you taking the time to read, and glad it gave you a laugh or two!
I thought it was perfect. I did not read it as slapstick funny but instead I read it as an accurate portrayal of adolescent angst. The humorous parts were carefully cupped between this boys innocence and his wild emotions. It was a bittersweet love story.
I thought it was brilliant too. Especially, some of his prose was stellar.
Outstanding. Loved it. One cops all the emotions of young love, it made me jealous of your skills lol.Great job Tom well deserved win 🏆
Thank you so much! Your words really are such an encouragement!
I love, love, love this story. You are an exceptional writer. You must be, because I didn't want the story to end. Congratulations Tom. Oh, and now I'm heading to a dictionary to find out what "panegyric" means. 😂
Lol I did look it up!
Full disclosure: I double-checked the definition before using it myself, haha! Thank you so much, and thank you for taking the time to read it!
I could visualize the boy in love. Well done!
Thank you very much Lori! Thanks for reading!
Wonderfully nostalgic and sweet. Well written and funny. Congrats on the win!
Thank you so much Andrew! A pleasure to write, and an even greater pleasure to receive such kind words!
This story perfectly encapsulates the awkwardness and bravery of a middle-schooler in love. What I love the most is that his love is not unrequited, as most first loves are, and that he is able to carry that moment and feeling around for the rest of his life. So well done-congrats on the win!
Thank you very much Wally! I hadn't considered how it might be unique in that respect; I certainly had my share of unrequited, adolescent infatuation as well! So appreciate you reading.
“ I used to wish that a bear would burst into the halls of our school, so that I’d have something to behead, something to lay at her feet”Amazing! Laughed out loud reading this. Congrats!
Yes. That was awesome!
Yes. That was awesome!
Perfect !
A delightful foray into the abyss of pre-adolescent attraction and infatuation. I loved this.
That means the world, Carla; thank you so much for reading! Abyss is right!
This was so witty and clever, and a blast to read. I thought that the modern setting, mixed with the almost poetic kind of language you used, made for a very enjoyable story! This was very deserving of the win. Keep up the good work!
Thank you Maggie- so appreciate you reading!
I enjoyed this piece a lot. Well done!
Thank you so much, Glenda!
Nicely done. It was cute.
Thank you very much Ashli!
Thank you very much Ashli!
Thank you Marty! I had to include it: that post-track-meet-feeling left indelible marks on my soul!
Great story and a nice stylistic choice to not include the speech. You allude to it in the end, great choice. Much deserved win
Thank you so much Jose! Hope whatever you imagined in its place was satisfying!
Thank you so much Jose! Hope whatever you imagined in its place was satisfying!
Thank you so much for writing this Anders; it's very thoughtful, and I'm so appreciative you took the time to read!
Congratulations, such a clever, witty and actually heart warming story. Your MC had such a unique almost Shakespearian voice filled with old world charm. I love the descriptions of his love, the reference to braces, and how he feels about Kyle Schwimmer. Well done!
Thank you so much Anne; your kind words mean the world, and encourage me to continue writing!
I loved this story. Such wonderful writing, I couldn’t stop reading. Please, keep writing on here so we can see more of your wonderful works.An amazingly well-deserved win.
Thank you so much Mason; it's very encouraging, and I so appreciate you taking the time to read!
I always try to red the winning stories to hopefully better my own writing, but none of the others I have read have been as much of a delight to read as this one.
I always try to red the winning stories to hopefully better my own writing, but none of the others I have read have been as much of a delight to read as this one.
I always try to red the winning stories to hopefully better my own writing, but none of the others I have read have been as much of a delight to read as this one.
Congratulations on your win! Loved every bit of it. John's character kind of reminded me of Kevin Arnold from The Wonder Years.
Thank you so much Chitralekha; thanks for taking the time to read!
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