STORY INFO
The Shift
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Author
Chris Miller
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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86
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Barnaby gazed out of his office window and imagined himself smoking moodily on the steel footbridge three floors below. He missed smoking and in his daydreams about it he was often overcoated and windswept in some gritty urban setting, giving off a sort of vaguely eastern European vibe. The footbridge over Chancellor’s Drive wasn’t exactly the Berlin Wall, but the mean little bridge which staple...
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Thank you, Michal. I was very tempted to write the actual shift too, or at least the start, or an image of it, but thought it might be better left to the imagination. I think Helen can hold her own in both worlds, but Barnaby probably can't. Thank you for reading.
Liked the description of grading the paper.Laughed at the thought of him in the too tight polo shirt uniform.🧐such quick thinking for the solution,hilarious.
Thanks for reading, Mary. Glad you liked it!
Thanks for reading, Mary. Glad you liked it!
I'm pleased you enjoyed it, Kailani. He's living in an ivory tower (or at least a concrete one) but at least he sort of knows it. I nearly wrote an end scene where he was behind the counter so there was a glimpse of how it went, but I thought ending it on the bridge was a better/more symmetrical structure. Thank you for reading and taking the time to leave such kind comments.
I'm pleased you enjoyed it, Kailani. He's living in an ivory tower (or at least a concrete one) but at least he sort of knows it. I nearly wrote an end scene where he was behind the counter so there was a glimpse of how it went, but I thought ending it on the bridge was a better/more symmetrical structure. Thank you for reading and taking the time to leave such kind comments.
Thank you very much, Tom. There was a huge opportunity to work Dasein or some other existentialist concept in to the story but I only wrote it on Thursday and just didn't have time to give it sufficient thought. Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave such thoughtful comments. Good luck with whatever you are working on.
So well done. The decision was wholly unexpected when it happened, yet well set up. When it happens, it seems perfect both in its ridiculous opposite-ness from the self-image he was day dreaming, and its absolute escape from his current drudgery. A really nice bit of writing.
Thanks RJ. I thought the set up was maybe a bit tenuous, but then I didn't want to make it too clear or the decision would seem obvious rather than unexpected. Sounds like I might have got the balance somewhere near right. Thanks for reading. I really appreciate the comment.
Thanks RJ. I thought the set up was maybe a bit tenuous, but then I didn't want to make it too clear or the decision would seem obvious rather than unexpected. Sounds like I might have got the balance somewhere near right. Thanks for reading. I really appreciate the comment.
I really appreciate the engagement. It's so fascinating to hear how stories are understood by different readers. I think he's pretty likeable really. At least sympathetic. It's basically a kind thing that he does, even though it's rash and far from selfless. Great to know I hit the spot for someone!
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