STORY INFO
The Ungentling
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Author
Katy B
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
158
Content
Bill’s disappeared upstairs with the little sickly girl but me I’m here to see the blind woman. I hear she did it on purpose, tore donkey tail out of the earth and smeared its milky sap directly in her eyes. It must of stung her hands and face bad and maybe left marks on her fingers. Near Santa Fe, men, women and children are always getting possessed of this sort of ecstasy and seem like taking pleasure in swallowing poison and fire and stepping on scorpions and suchlike. But it ain’t superstition like the government try to tell me in the...
Outstanding reviews
Congratulations, Katy! Seems like moving the story was the right call :)
Thank you so much, Michał!! I normally wouldn't move a story but it was too perfect of a prompt :)
" ... the self not itself emptied of itself ... " I love how eloquently stated yet the message is powerful. Just like the rest of the story. I enjoyed reading it.
Thank you, Hayley!
I have read this to the end, how come the record is showing otherwise? Anyway, congrats even if weeks late.
Thank you, Philip! I'm glad you read my stories.
Welcome.
The story was great other than the sensitive context
Thank you, Natalie!
The store is told in a manner that sucks me in as I read , I cannot help but feel I am there, and easy with the storyline as i sink, deeper into the story it begin to materialize in my mind, marking me feel that life in someway was part of me
Thank you, Brad! I'm so glad my story was able to resonate with you.
Great job Katy ! You deserved the prize on this one! Dialogue is perfection. I will look forward to reading more of your entries!
Thank you for the kind words, LJ!
Hectic, but I loved it.
Thank you, Caroline!
The diction is super great. It brings me directly into the thinking of the main character. It truly feels like someone narrating an experience worth remembering to the reader. And truly brought out the roughness of life and how it all rubs against each other to create this western journey.Thanks
Thank you so much, Linda!
Just bookmarking a favorite. Congratulations @katyYour story is so dark and gripping, it sucks us into this harsh place.
Thank you, Fernando!
Congratulations Katy! I love the story, and I thought the ending was particularly strong. It was a gripping read.
Thank you for the kind words, Kevin -- I loved your story "Saguaro" too!
Thanks so much! Esoterica grabbed it, and I couldn't be happier.
I'm glad resubmitting this turned out to be the right call.
Thank you, Anne!
Congrats the win your story was the right action:)
Thanks so much, Sultan!
Wow, I really enjoyed reading this story! Congratulations on the win, Katy!
Thank you so much, Anna!
I liked the philosophical slant to this story. Here in England we tend to have a narrow view of the American western.
Haha, well I'm glad this story was a little more broad! Thank you, Sue!
Ten submissions, two wins. woman, you are in a class of your own. Congrats.
Your praise flatters me.
There is a powerful sort of voice of the subconscious running through this that I really appreciated. And of course that dark Cormac McCarthy vibe, too. Nice.
Thank you, Brian! I'm glad you enjoyed the vibe :)
I love that the story is told in the voice of the character as he would speak. The vivid descriptions pull you in. It's easy to see why this story won!
Haha tha k you for the kind words Tori!!
I'm obsessed with how good you are at Paul's voice and narration! The way there aren't too many commas or pauses (particularly in the beginning) is such a good way to establish his tone, and I knew so much about him just from the way he narrated. The phonetic spelling also went above and beyond with establishing his accent, well done!
Thank you so much, Julian! I'm so glad the voice came through for you :)
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Thank you so much, Tommy :)
A heart-wrenching story. So vivid, as if you'd really lived as Hugh. Your last line - mercy beyond the violence. Amazing piece of work.
Thank you so much, Angie!
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