STORY INFO
The Uninvited
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Author
Karen Corr
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
30
Content
The story begins with Jason tossing his camping gear down the steps. Then he kicks it. Then he hits the wall with his fist. His mother's boyfriend, Kyle, steps into the living room and gives him a look. His mother starts to say something, but Kyle silences her."Get ahold of yourself, boy. You know what to do. Just because life unravels doesn't mean you have the right to unravel along with it. At fourteen, you've come to the age where you're too old to act this way. We've talked about this before."Jason takes deep breaths, th...
Outstanding reviews
Oh my gosh, Karen!What a beautifully written story! The POV was great because it gave us the sense of confusion and fear as we slowly built up this story. I also loved the way that you introduced all of these characters-as kids, there’s so little control with who is or isn’t in our lives. Nice work and congratulations on the shortlist!!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment so positively, Amanda. I’m glad you enjoyed it. (:
This really had me on edge. The pacing was really well done, and I loved the ending. Well done.
Thank you, Kevin! Your praise means a lot. ;-)
Congrats. Scary one. Zachary ha!
Thank you Philip! Thanks for reading and liking!
Welcome.
This was a good story, I was engaged and did not expect that twist at the end. Loved it!
Thank you, Serena! I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Congrats on the shortlist!I loved how you created the boys as characters, and their individual viewpoints of dealing with an absent father. The mental abuse they both suffered erupted in different ways. Jason eventually learned to pour water on his emotions- For poor Zach, it sparked into violence. Great twist at the end-Thanks!
Thank you, Marty! I'm glad you liked it! 😊
Two half siblings bonding over their sh** head of a father… How wholesome. Until it wasn’t. 😂I loved this 💜Well done!!! Congrats!!!
Thank you so much, Danie! Your comments mean a lot to me.
Congratulations!!! How exciting 😊
Same to you! Best of luck on your next entry!
Good luck to you as well! I’m having the best time being part of this group, reading and writing all week.
Wow! I did not see that end coming and it really scared me! Job well done!
Thanks! I thought I left too many clues.
Thanks! I thought I left too many clues.
Nothing builds confidence for a writer than when a reader responds just like you did. Thank you so much for your praise, Mike. You made my day.
Wow! Devilishly delightful ending. Great Story.
Thank you Ty! Thanks for reading and I appreciate the praise.
Hey Karen,I enjoyed reading your story and liked the escalating tension leading to the twist at the end. I would’ve loved more background info about Dad and the reasons for his behaviour; had he been badly treated in the past? What happened during the marriage that caused him to be unfaithful? Why was he so selfish and self-obsessed?However, overall I reckon you’ve written an impressive piece and I look forward to your next one.Take careHH
Poor Jason had those same questions….Thanks for reading, Howard. Thank you for your critique and kind words.
Scary good story with horrific twist.
Thanks, Mary! (❁´◡`❁)
Congrats on shortlist!
Thank you, Mary! 😊
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