STORY INFO
Unreliable
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Author
Scott Christenson
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
63
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Jake called the Windy City Ice hotline. His grandfather’s voice answered. “If your Windy City Ice machine is currently malfunctioning, leave your name and contact number after the beep. Our licensed service technician will contact you shortly. Windy City Ice is a family-owned company, and we care about our customers.”Jake hung up and returned to writing The Siren Under Highway D. Writing was an escape from his father. After grandfather's passing, the company's accountant made it clear that Windy City was heading toward b...
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Fine work. It's ghost week and summoning family dead for help is allowed.
Thanks, halloween season!
Great take on the prompt Scott! What I love here is the character development. First we start out with our boy thinking things like “powerless to stop his father.” But then as the story progresses he uses his knowledge of his fathers behavior to manipulate him into more or less changing his mind in the direction our MC wants it to go. Clever trick! Thus showing he isn’t so powerless after all, is he? Thanks for the story!
Thx! Had heard something about 'save the cat' and thought he needed to have a bit of a victory at the end.
Ghost writer believes in better business believers.Great shortlist pick. Congrats!
I don't know how to write a ghost story, so wrote a ghostwriter story !
Thanks! so happy to be getting back on the shortlist after a 6 month dry run! My slightly riduculous "I" characters seem to get a few laughs;)
I love the way you creatively approached the prompt of "raising the dead" here. This was a fun, witty read.
Thx Audrey. This was def a story for writers, happy you enjoyed it!
Congratulations Scott! Hope you are celebrating 🎉🎉 🎉
Yeah, so happy to have made the shortlist this week!
A great story Scott. It was so vivid , at points I was laughing aloud as I read it. The way you wrote Jake’s introductions for his stories was artful. The character of the grandfather shines through and I loved the idea of the ghostwriter. Interesting the way you turn Jake’s situation into something more rewarding. He may not have the success he longs for as a writer, but his life is not doomed. An enjoyable read.
Happy to hear you enjoyed it. So happy to hear you got a few laughs out of it, sometimes I try to make things as ridiculous as possible to give readers something to chuckle about.
Wonderful story! It spoke to me personally as my grandfather was a sign painter and one of my many passions is painting. Each time I letter a quote or sentiment over a wooden canvas, I feel as though my hands are being guided. Jake and I might just be kindred spirits...haha.
Thx for reading! Thats nice to hear you still feel such a strong connection to your grandfather. Painting is such a good hobby, I wish i had a talent for it. Thx again for your nice comment
Enjoyed reading this, Scott. Great take on the prompt AND a novel new meaning of a ‘ghostwriter’ 😁
Thx for reading and commenting! 'ghostwriter' was the first thing I thougth of for a ghost prompt haha.
Thx for reading and commenting! 'ghostwriter' was the first thing I thougth of for a ghost prompt haha.
Thanks for reading Michal. I hated to dash Jake's dream of being an award winning novelist, but I had just watched Jessica Brody's Save the Cat! youtube video (v useful viewing), and realized Jake needed an 'all is lost' point, before he pivoted into a new mission. There were a few paragraphs about Jake going to business school, where he was mostly dreaming about being a novelist, that I had cut out. In a longer story that would probably be useful foreshadowing.
Makes sense - we resist change if we're too comfortable. I'll have to give that a watch, thanks for the recommendation!
Woo! Congrats on the shortlist :)
Thanks! so happy to be getting back on the shortlist after the 6 month dry spell!
Really nice twist on the prompt Scott. The sometimes mean-spirited dialogue between the main characters was brilliantly done. Enjoyed this a lot. Thanks for sharing.Typo on unbelieavable in the italics towards the end
Thanks for reading Tom. Yeah I used to write dialogue with people agreeing with each other, but another writer here pointed out that in every movie like the Avengers,etc, if you pay attention, even the good guys on the same side are constantly arguing with each other.
Thanks for reading Tom. Yeah I used to write dialogue with people agreeing with each other, but another writer here pointed out that in every movie like the Avengers,etc, if you pay attention, even the good guys on the same side are constantly arguing with each other.
Thanks, that's really good to know! I'll trim a few sentences in the first half to speed things up. Rereading it all now, I think i dropped this in a bit early;)
No worries Scott!
Great job as always, Scott. I thought this was just a great take on the prompt. The arc is terrific as well.
Great job as always, Scott. I thought this was just a great take on the prompt. The arc is terrific as well.
Thx, that makes sense, keep things real and immediate with showing. I often tell ppl that😅 will think of some fun trouble makers to drop into this this week. Had fun adapting my half finished comedy from last week today into something new so put it out early
My head immediately went to a really irate Karen who runs a spa and she says she is losing business because people are complaining online that their cucumber water is barely cold with few cubes and people would be better off going to Derek's Detox Dance studio down the road. Ha.
Haha brilliant. Such a weird contrast to this story im def go to add something like that
I manged to combine a Karen who needs heart shaped ice in her customers cucumber water with the story of Zima in 1993. think there might be quite a few new subplots to Jake's ice story before Friday. thx for the push!
I like it! Nicely done Scott.
So happy to have made the shortlist! This story was partly inspired by having a laugh reading the best worst opening sentences in the "It was a dark and storm night..." competition:https://www.bulwer-lytton.com/2023
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