STORY INFO
Vanishing Point
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Author
Howard Halsall
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
6 months ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
44
Content
Time stopped for me one Saturday night a year ago, at eleven-thirty-five p.m. I’d no sense of danger as I meandered home in the dark and if there was an omen present in the stars, then I missed all the signs. That’s not surprising because I’m not superstitious and my attention was elsewhere as I approached the crossroads.Sylvie and I had argued earlier about my impromptu night out, and she’d sent endless messages to my phone expressing her annoyance. It was nothing to get upset about and I ought to have apologised rather than ...
Outstanding reviews
What a tragic tale, very well told!I was totally on the edge of my seat at the moment of the defibrillator. Your descriptions of teetering between life and death were so vivid. Well done 👏
Hi Shirley,Thank you for taking the time to read my latest story and share your thoughts; they’re much appreciated.Take careHH
A tragic loss that shouldn’t have been. Thanks Howard!
Hey Karen,Thank you for reading my latest. I hope you enjoyed it…Take careHH
Aww the last line really hurt. He was only 27 :(Well done !
Hey Hannah,Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. Concerning your comment about the age, you know what they say; ”Only the good die young….”Take careHH
Liked it! 👍 I Loved the descriptions, they are exceptional! I'm sorry he's wandering forever. Check out my story - a different type of ending for a ghost.
Hey Andrea,Thank you for reading story and sharing your positive thoughts; they’re much appreciated. Take careHH
I liked your use of imagery throughout this story. It lightened the heavier load of the death. The image of the deflating party balloon contrasted his life leaking out like the air nicely. And quite the existential ending here!
Hi Nina,Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. I’m glad you enjoyed it and pleased you appreciated the use of imagery. I was trying to paint a visual sub text which can be tricky at times and embarrassing when it’s done badly, so it’s relief to discover I might have achieved a modest level of success.Take careHH
I smiled at your reply because I feel the same way about writing. I worry it missed the mark at times, and hold my breath at how it’s taken. I think you wrote this well and I enjoyed the use of visuals and how you painted them! 👏🏻
Aw shucks :)
Hi Howard.Your story is so visceral and raw when it came to the brutal end of life scenes, I was unable to stop reading. An excellent read and what an apt conclusion. A great sense of a wasted life. Well done.
Hi Helen,Thank you for reading my story and sharing your thoughts. It sounds like you thoroughly enjoyed it and that’s as much as any writer can ask for….Take careHH
The story is relatable in today’s hyper connected world. Keep your own eyes up sir. 😊
Hi Tim,I’ll take your advice and also thank you for reading my story and responding. I’m pleased you enjoyed and glad it rang true.Take careHH
An easy read full of emotion, well done mate.
Hi Gareth,Thank you for your positive thoughts and encouragement; very much appreciated.Take careHH
Great story, and very well told!
Phone hazard.Thanks for liking my 'Run,Forest, Run'
Very succinct :)
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