STORY INFO
Whale Song
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Author
Danielle Barr
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Categories
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Danh mục
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Update
1 year ago
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Part Chapter
1/??
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Reads
66
Content
Agony broils, but anguish simmers. I have known them both well and in equal measure. In the early days, my brain felt blurry and disjointed; I had the sense of being deep underwater, all undulating shadows and echoing whale song. The darkness was expansive, and the staticky, dull sense of confusion I felt was sometimes intercut with crippling panic. BP is spiking, ...
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Wow this was absolutely amazing. Your writing style, the implications, all of it. I am blown away by this story.
I don't think I'll ever get the image of that poor spider out if my brain. This reads like the modern day equivalence of why bells were erected for coffins. Only she has no bell. Chilling. The imagery paints across my mind as I read. Very well done.
There's not a lot I can say that hasn't already been said about this one. It feels so melancholy in a way. The passing of life. I sometimes wonder if my mother experienced something like this during her passing...
From July to September this year I sat almost every day by my sister's bed in the ICU and rehab and back to the ICU as she cycled slowly toward an inevitable end, unable to swallow or speak. But her eyes said she knew plenty about what was happening. I can't tell you how deeply this touched me. Thank you.
I am so sorry for your loss, Carla. I hope she also had the opportunity to swim bravely down to the deep and was carried away by gentle tides 🧡
Fascinating writing. Congrats on the win
I nearly cried at this story, although I did not completely understand what she was going through, I felt her pain. The most touching part was with the spider, you are a very skilled writer and I am honoured to have read this amazing story, your writing technique brought tears to my eyes, congrats on the well deserved win, I don’t think anyone could’ve done better! ❤️
Congratulations on this well deserved win! Really incredible story. 🎉
Congratulations on this well deserved win! Really incredible story. 🎉
Oh my god, this is beautifully written. I love how it is never explicitly said but the reader can still tell what exactly is going on. You can really feel the tides take her in and slowly feel the numbness as she dies through the structure and the description of the mundane goings on of life just make it worse. I almost cried at the end, when she talks about wanting to live by the beach and then that analogy about the table. So VERY well written!
I thoroughly enjoyed this. Keep writing. ❤️
Well done. You've encapsulated this moment so perfectly. It's what I imagine it would be like to be medically trapped in your mind, conscious, and yet unable to do or say anything. I like that she is not panicky, though, or struggling in the basic sense. She's more observant than anything. Wonderful :)
Congratulations with this very moving piece. The first statement is a big hit! Wishing you continued writing and sharing. As a newbie, I have no idea what the points mean. If it shows my opinion on the piece, I would give it the most possible. If it judges my opinion, I'll take whatever it gives me.
Wow! So descriptive and causing me such reflection. It is certainly worth the win. It’s stories like this that keep me reading the entries. When someone can move me to think and feel deeper, I’m wowed !Thank you.
I was so wishing that she would drift back into consciousness, wiser and eager to reclaim her personhood.
Easy to see why this won. You are making a habit of winning. Congrats.
I'm just now getting a chance to read this and wow... I read it again and again. It is just so quietly devastating and beautiful. this... "The deep water presses in on you, makes your heartbeat roar in your ears. Every sound reverberates against itself in an infinite echo, pixelated, like a lagging video." This is what the words did in my head when I read. Reverberated.So wonderfully written.I also loved the "I want to crawl out of my skin. (But of course I can't.)"Thank you for this.
Bravo! Amazing writing style by the way!
Danielle, this was beautiful and heart-wrenching and the perfect way to write to the prompt — a narrator who does not command her body nor all her senses, and we experience everything through this perspective.Well done and a well deserved win!
Absolutely beautiful.
Wow! Beautifully written! Congrats on the win!
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